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[Gypsy] - A Poem by SplitX

Started by SplitX, October 26, 2009, 08:04:53 AM

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SplitX

Flames leaped and licked at the sky
as the wood they consumed began to die.
The moon shone down into that forest clearing
and drums the creatures were surely hearing.
Feet pounded against the ground in smooth beats,
her hair blown in the wind, looking like black silk sheets.
Her skin was mocha splashed onto a slender canvas,
and as she sang, one knew she was in pure bliss.
Bells jingled as she pranced around,
a gorgeous happy-Gypsy sound.
She would dance in sing until the light,
so she just danced on into the night.

This is a 4-minute remake of a poem I'd written long ago. XD Once I find the original, I think I'll post it here or on another thread. It's much better than this one. I just felt like reminding myself to post it. Heheheeeee.
So, for a 4-minute poem, is it at least decent? x3 All critique/comments are welcome.